Guthrie Memorial Teen Writer's Club

Guthrie Memorial Teen Writer's Club
The Guthrie Memorial Library Round Table Writers, so named for the table in our meeting room, have been sharing ideas and stories since November, 2010. We have been visited by Hanover Poet Laureates past and present, and we welcome any opportunity to learn more about the art of writing.

Sunday, March 27, 2011

From my heart to yours.

In a field of exotic flowers,

eyes closed and head tilted upward

breathing in slowly

the scent of true inner beauty,

my eyes snap open and my head quickly turns

to the source of a tear filled scream.


On the top of a hill,

surrounded by dark clouds,

lies a flower whithering from the absence of her sun,

pleading for the warmth and safety that once radiated over her

and to rid herself of this darkened world.


As I listen to each tortured plea,

tears streaming from every scream,

my heart rushes forward to the hills top, arms outheld,

yearning to save this whithering flower from a world without warmth,

to lift her above the clouds and into the light,

to turn her drooping smile into a sunlit grin

and to comfort her in my embrace so she may feel the love in my heart

and be free of every sorrowful tear.
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4 comments:

  1. KellinaMarch 28, 2011 at 3:31 PM

    ...woah...

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  2. D.J.MMarch 28, 2011 at 8:11 PM

    What are your thoughts?

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  3. GML Round Table WritersMarch 28, 2011 at 8:42 PM

    The imagery is intense. The punctuation is distracting. How can you edit to maintain the tension throughout, instead of losing it at each pause, each break?

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  4. D.J.MMarch 28, 2011 at 10:49 PM

    I used the commas to show a split in the lines. It was written in 3 or 4 different section but when I posted it turned into a paragraph form. I will revise the punctuation to smooth things out.

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